Monday, February 8, 2016

1st Annual Valentiny Writing Contest 2016

Fun abounds over at Susanna Leonard Hill's blog this week. She is sponsoring the "First Annual Pretty Much World Famous Valentiny Contest!"

The Contest Rules:  Since writing for children is all about “big emotion for little people” and Valentines Day is all about emotion, write a Valentines story appropriate for children (children here defined as ages 12 and under) maximum 214 words in which someone is grumpy!  Your story can be poetry or prose, sweet, funny, surprising or anything in between, but it will only count for the contest if it includes someone grumpy (can be the main character but doesn’t have to be) and is 214 words (Get it? 2/14 for Valentines Day) You can go under the word count but not over!

So here is my entry at 211 words:



A Valentiny Birthday
by Kristi Veitenheimer


“A birthday on Valentine’s Day. Just once, I’d like to feel special,” Val thought. Then she remembered her birthday breakfast and bounded downstairs.


“Morning, Mom!”


“Morning. Grab some cereal,” Mom replied. She blew a kiss and headed out the door.


No heart-shaped, chocolate chip pancakes?


Frowning, Val ate Captain Crunch.


At school her best friend, Haley, screamed, “Happy Valentines Day!” Val scowled.


At recess Val played in the outfield during kickball. She kicked dirt and stuck her tongue out at the worms.


At lunch Val ripped into her sack. No special note. She slumped in her seat and picked at her bologna sandwich.


Later the students made cards for their Valentine party. Val cut a crooked heart and scribbled “Happy Whatever.” As students whispered and giggled, she sulked.


Just before party time, Val sat with arms crossed and steam blowing out her ears. “May I get a drink?” she asked and stomped out.


Everyone had forgotten her birthday. Val sipped from the water fountain and returned.


“Happy birthday to you, happy birthday to you…”


She looked up to see her classmates, teacher, and mom singing around a birthday cake with seven flaming candles! Classmates handed her birthday cards made that afternoon.

Smiling, Val knew this was the most special birthday ever!

21 comments:

  1. So much emotion in so few words. Good job!

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    1. Thanks, Jaclyn! I love entering contests--they're so fun!

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  2. Great job conveying Val's grumpiness. Nice work!

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    1. Thanks! I might have been grumpy myself a time or two!

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  3. Val certainly has her grump on, Kristi :) Great emotions and action. I like that satisfying ending :)

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  4. Charlotte, you are always so sweet and encouraging!

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  5. Great minds think alike! Mine is a Birthday/Valentine's day party too. :)

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    1. Wonderful! You can never have too many birthdays or parties!

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  6. What a nice surprise at the end. Well done! =)

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    1. Thanks, Gregory! Something had to eventually go her way!

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  7. I can totally picture Val's grumpiness! Great job. :)

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  8. Really felt the grumpies & the love at the end of the story - great entry, Kristi!

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    1. Thanks, Patricia! I have friends with birthdays on or near holidays, so I always try to separate the two and make sure they get a chance to celebrate their birthday.

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  9. I love how the day starts out so plain-- cereal.... bologna.... and then turns into a fun surprise! Great job! :)

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    1. Thanks, Carrie! It was a fun story to write.

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  10. Poor Val! I could feel her hurt and disappointment, and how they came out as grumpiness. How nice that everyone got together to give her a special surprise party for her Valentine birthday! Thanks so much for joining in the first ever Valentiny fun, Kristi!

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